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英作文のチェックをお願いします。 I’ve always been interested in learning in ...

英作文のチェックをお願いします。
I’ve always been interested in learning in different culture. I would like to change myself because I am timid person. I think the experiences in the different

culture make me strong and untimid. That's why I decided to go abroad to study.

[Germany is an attractive country for me. I am interested in beautiful towns and nature in Germany. ]1
I am really looking forward to see these because I like the Grimm fairy tale from a child. Therefore, I would like to know that How was the story born. Also, I am interested in Opera. I think that opera is one of the symbols of the culture of Europe.
[I would like to see artistic clothes and the setting. Moreover, I like refined and unique Germany design. ]2
I would like to know how the design, national character, nature, and tradition related. I think that it is important for learning advertising design to know the relation between the culture and design. Furthermore, I will be inspired by friends who has different consciousness.

I know that living in the country where the language and the culture are different is hard. However, I want to dare to challenge because I think that it leads to grow myself. Also, I think understanding another culture is also a way to understand my own better. I would like to widen my perspectives through being exposed to different values. I believe this program allows me to break out my shell and see the spectrum of the world as a whole. I will be able to learn balance and adaptability

訳:私はずっと異文化の中で学ぶ事に興味があった。私は小心者な自分を変えたい。
異文化での経験は私を強く自信のある人間にすると思う。だから留学を決意した。

1略
私はこれらを見るのが楽しみだ
何故ならグリム童話が好きだからだ
私はどのように物語が生まれたのか知りたい
また、オペラにも興味がある
オペラはヨーロッパの文化の象徴の一つだと思う
2略
デザインと国民性、自然、伝統とがどのように関係しているか知りたい
デザインと文化の関係性を知る事は広告デザインを学ぶ上で重要だと思う
さらに、異なる思想を持つ友人から刺激を受けるだろう

文化も言葉も違う国での生活は大変だろうが、あえて私は挑戦したい
なぜならそれが自分を成長させると思うからだ
また、異文化を理解することは自国の文化をより良く理解する手段でもあると思う

補足: 私は異なった価値観に触れて視野を広げたい
このプログラムによって自分の殻を破り、世界の様々な面を見てバランスと適応性が学べると信じている

以上です
お見苦しい文ですが、
訂正箇所・スマートに言い換えられる文等がありましたら教えてください。
よろしくお願いします。

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質問日時：

2009/3/24 05:21:02
解決日時：

2009/3/26 22:33:34
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burgmannd9さん

I have long wanted to study in a culturally different environment. (be interested in よりも、want の方が強い気持ちが伝わる） I have three reasons for applying for this program.

First, Because I am a timid person, I wish to change myself. I believe experiences of studying in a different culture will make a new me of what I am now; a new me with confidence and a strong will.

Second, Germany is an attractive country to me. I am interested in beautiful towns and the nature of Germany because I have been an ardent reader of Grimm's Fairy Tales since childhood. I want to know how such wonderful tales were born and in what environment. Opera is also motivation for wanting to live in Germany. I love German opera very much. My understanding is that German opera symbolizes one aspect of European culture.

Third, above all, my inerest goes to the German clothes, new and traditional, unique and refined. I want to look into how designs of the clothes, the nature, and tradition of Germany were interwoven with the national character. I believe such an approach will be helpful in studying advertising design. In addition, I will try to get inspiration from people from different cultural backgrounds with different sensibility. This is not possible in Japan. ]

I know living in a foreign country is hard where everything is so different; the food, language and way of living, to mention some. However, I am firmly determined that by all means I will get along in Germany studying. This program will help me develope as a human being as well as a student of advertising design. It also will be an opportunity for me to get to know more about Japan when living in German culture

以上。

「おおよそ、質問者の言いたいことを英語に移し変えていると思いますが、思わぬところで勘違いがあるかもしれません。また、あちこち、（英語として通るように）少し変えています。]