英検準一級の添削お願いします(>_<) なるべく大幅に変えないでいただくと嬉しいです… ●Write an essay on the given TOPIC. ●Use TWO of the POINTS below to support your answer. ●Structure: introduction, main body, and conclusion ●Suggested length: 120-150 words TOPIC Should people stop using goods that are made from animals? POINTS ●Animal rights ●Endangered species ●Product Quality ●Tradition I think people should stop using goods that are made from animals. I have two reasons to support my opinion. To begin with, if people hunt animals to make products such as fur, clothes, and furniture are break animals' habitats. Animals, like humans, have lives and senses. We should be more friendly to animals. In addition, human bad acts such as hunting or poaching have a negative effect on the food chain. If people hunt horses, the animals who eat horses are confused about meals. If people stop bad acts, it will increase endangered species. It is a good idea that people should not use goods that are made from animals. I think people should not use animals but should use plant-derived products.
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