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添削お願いします I think junior high school students should not bring their smartphones to school. It is necessary for them to make their personality and interest at junior high school. Smartphones may prevent these actions. Also,smartphones can solve many questions we thought. It seems to be attractive for students. However,it might prevent us to think about solve questions because search on internet is easier than thinking it ourselves. Strictly speaking,Junior highschool students don't have to have their personal smartphones at school or home.I enjoyed my school life without smartphones when I was a junior high school student. Therefore,if you want improving ability and creativity,I think it is better not to bring smartphones to school.
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I think junior high school students should not bring their smartphones to school. It is necessary for them to form their personalities and develop their interests in junior high school. Smartphones may prevent these things from happening. Also, smartphones can help us find answers to many of our questions. It seems to be attractive for students. However, having smartphones might prevent us from thinking about how to solve questions because searching on the Internet is easier than thinking by ourselves. Junior high school students really don't need to have their smartphones at school or home. I enjoyed my school life without smartphones when I was a junior high school student. Therefore, for students wishing to improve their abilities and creativity, I think it is better not to bring smartphones to school. (Good job!)
質問者からのお礼コメント
ありがとうございます！これだけ綺麗にまとまっていると読む側もすっきりとした気持ちになれますね。。。とても参考になりました！
お礼日時：1/25 20:51
