could you please modify my Eiken pre one grade essay？ 英検準1級のエッセイの添削をしていただけますか？ write an essay on the given topic. use two of the points below to support your answer. structure：introduction,main body,and conclusion suggested length：120〜150 words TOPIC Is legalized gambling beneficial to society？ I think legalized gambling is unbeneficial to the society.I am going to explain why it is not profit. First of all,many people play gambling because of enjoying and fun.However, it is very big peril. Gambling has addiction which it is same thing like illegal drug.If they addict it, they will be easy to debut.And they use up money and also lose important things like family,pet,mementos,mind. As a result, they have left nothing and derail their life. Secoundly,gambling is easy to generate the crime such as theft,neglecting the children.Gambling makes all of things crazy for the life.If people play the gambling, they ought not use money for another things to stimulate the economy. In a conclusion,gambling ising very big risky to play and to use up money. So, it is unbeneficial to society.
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